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Synopsis: Working Title - Cold Ghost Joel was just a regular ol' park ranger, minding his own business when Yukihiro burst through a window and into his life. Now, he's trapped in a web of deceit and danger that goes beyond 'hilarious misunderstanding' and driven straight to 'mortal peril'. Will Joel survive the adventure? Will Yukihiro ever explain what it's all about? Or will everyone just be eaten alive by bears? ( Chapter 1: Hot Gossip )

Synopsis: Working Title - Cold Ghost

Joel was just a regular ol' park ranger, minding his own business when Yukihiro burst through a window and into his life. Now, he's trapped in a web of deceit and danger that goes beyond 'hilarious misunderstanding' and driven straight to 'mortal peril'.

Will Joel survive the adventure? Will Yukihiro ever explain what it's all about? Or will everyone just be eaten alive by bears?

Here is the prologue for 'Cold Ghost'. That's the title I'm giving it for now, but I don't particularly like it at the moment. I don't know if it really says much about the story... The prologue has been edited, but anything you see highlighted in red are the bits I don't like and think need re-working. Please remember that this is a work in progress, so I'm not feeling over ly confident yet, but constructive criticism is appreciated.
( Cold Ghost: Prologue )

Question: I competed in NaNo 2009. I hit 50K. I am currently in the process of finishing and then editing the novel. Would you guys be interested in reading it? If I manage to get it up to scratch, I'm debating on whether or not I should try for publishing with it... MAD. I KNOW. It still needs a damn title.

Explanation: I have taken down the prologue for Nephilim that was up on FictionPress and LJ. Mostly because I want to get to work on Nehpilim and give it my all, but also because I feel kind of vulnerable with it up. I intend to work really hard on it, and it is the project that I would LOVE to see getting published... I doubt many will notice, because it wasn't exactly raking people in, but hey ho, it's not a big deal.

I am going to bed now. Will write a proper post later.